Goal: Analyse focalisation and transform a passage while keeping the chosen story situation coherent.
Prepare: S02–S04, C01; source strips or text.
- Choose and begin · 5 min. Place S02’s “Eli heard it as a pin touching a balloon” beside Lee’s question. Choose who seems more certain in that moment; point to language rather than vote on who is good.
- Read/model or source access · 8 min. Read S02/S03 and C01. Model third-person access to Eli’s thought versus first-person access to Lee’s attention. Show that focalisation is a choice about what a reader can know, not merely swapping I for they. Teacher craft example, new fiction: ‘I saw FINAL before I saw Eli. The letters made the room look decided, although the chairs were still asking questions.’ This Lee-style first-person transformation selects the heading before the person and gives furniture a metaphorical role. It is a possible new composition, not extra source testimony; students need not copy it.
- Explore or independent plan · 12 min. Mark one thought, one speech line and one narrator comparison. Explore two defensible readings of “ready”: welcome/order or premature closure. Look for a phrase that complicates each.
- Make a response · 15 min. Transform a short S02–S04 moment from Lee, Mara or an own invented observer. Keep the same moment’s established actions, but choose sensory detail, sentence length and what remains outside this observer’s knowledge. Explain one choice to the intended reader.
- Review · 6 min. Read the transformed passage alongside the source. Use an own check or willing peer/teacher comment: does the voice remain consistent? A new invented thought is creative authorship, not a discovery about an actual person. Revise if useful.
- Keep/next move · 4 min. Save source passage, own transformation and one explanation. Missing earlier work stays missing; begin from today’s text if needed.