Choose a change or something clear to keep. Explain its job.
My own try
Read the whole different source
Practice draft: Find the Leaf Drawing. Open the folder. Look on page 1 for the leaf drawing. The intended reader is a new display visitor. Another possible edit changes the last line to Turn to page 1 and find the leaf drawing. No reader trial is given.
Adult reads the whole source neutrally when wanted; exact child-directed recording, pointing/sign/AAC/drawing/type/speech remain available. Match print separately; no voice/neatness/speed gate.